Tuesday, September 4, 2012

Cross country recount

Today we practiced recrafting a piece of writing. The first paragraph belongs to Aldora and the second is mine.

“Cross country, Cross country” is the worst event ever. I would never dream about cross country. Today is cross country and I am not feeling good. But I  just want to support my team TE ARAWA.  “GO TE ARAWA” I said quietly to myself.

This is my version of Aldora's story

Cross country “Why me?” I sat nervously. I didn’t know if I could win or if I might fall in the mud. I took a big breath and remembered the race from last year. I then knew what my goals were, I just hoped I would win.

1 comment:

  1. Hi Brandon,

    I like your writing because it has got a lot of topic words.