Walking to the hall I could hear the rest of the school chatting. I wondered what we were doing if I hadn't been daydreaming I would have known what we were doing. But as I was walking I saw a Duffy trailer and then I knew why we were going in to the hall. It was a Duffy show. Almost tripping over the chairs outside the hall, I then thought that it was a good idea to focus. It was so hot I wanted a mobile fan to bring everywhere I went.
I think that everyone was starting to get annoyed and angry because the show hadn't started. There was lots of moving while waiting I even saw someone getting a growling.
Duffy had a cloak on that had all sorts of books. All of a sudden I heard a yell. Duffy was reading a book, he was playing the king in the book. The book was called the king of colours. I could see that everyone was then excited that the show had started.
Hi Brandon,
ReplyDeleteI really like how you have edited this piece of writing and taken on board some of my suggestions. I also like the way in which you reorganised your existing ideas. This has given your writing a better flow.
Well done Brandon!
Mr Crowe.