Wednesday, February 12, 2014

The Duffy show

Walking to the hall I could hear the rest of the school chatting. I wondered what we were doing if I hadn't been daydreaming I would have known what we were doing. But as I was walking I saw a Duffy trailer and then I knew why we were going in to the hall. It was a Duffy show. Almost tripping over the chairs outside the hall, I then thought that it was a good idea to focus. It was so hot I wanted a mobile fan to bring everywhere I went.

I think that everyone was starting to get annoyed and angry because the show hadn't started. There was lots of moving while waiting I even saw someone getting a growling.

Duffy had a cloak on that had all sorts of books. All of a sudden I heard a yell. Duffy was reading a book, he was playing the king in the book. The book was called the king of colours. I could see that everyone was then excited that the show had started.

1 comment:

  1. Hi Brandon,

    I really like how you have edited this piece of writing and taken on board some of my suggestions. I also like the way in which you reorganised your existing ideas. This has given your writing a better flow.

    Well done Brandon!

    Mr Crowe.